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Lyrics im messing with right now.
« on: May 30, 2009, 10:56:56 PM »

Here is some stuff im working on currently.  I usually compile a lot of material then compress it into one song out of the best stuff. This is just some of the stuff I've been writing lately and plan to compress later :   

individually, cant none'a yall belittle me,
my wordplay, be exact as symmetry.
Im simple-ly,
Speakin definitive over infinite time lines,
searchin through my mind, just to find rhymes,
n' I define rhymes,
through narration of my mind,
examin'n hard times,
& explain'n it on time.... on pace,
through words I create,
imagery, to which yall can relate.
even if your stuck a state,
locked between a rock and a hard place.




Inflicting Lesions to your legions.
Words are adhesive, stick into ya' mind, defensive and blind;
We seem to be regressing at times,
But this message is mine,
Open your mind, one time, n' let me in;
So I can educate via pad n' the pen. 
It don't always take a master to win,
but disasters within, contained within my brain & released through a pen.
Step up to the mic n' I'll defeat you again,
step into the light so the people see your face as I win. 
Battle after battle yall can try to defend,
but eventually your ghost writer'll run outta lyrics to lend.
Cause the period ends....
But its just the beginning,
Sharp with the words, I speak through incisions.
Stand tall or back down, its time you made a decision.
I divide n' conquer, reduce your crew through division.
Im rappin for amusement, yall rap for a livin.
Yet I still get respect for my spittin.
Get out the stitches and Styptics, cause im opening wounds ,
Kickin' open hells gates..... and welcoming doom.   


  I define through rhymes,
at times, my mind feels chaotic and blind,
my optics are fine, but my vision is clouded,
the nonsense of this world got me feelin surrounded,
& boxed in.... forced into a cage n' locked in.
But I push-through the struggle-rise above the rubble...
I'm just a man, whos flaws are subtle,
but over beats im raw n' cause trouble.
I will, stand firm, im not budgin' 
hopin that the greener pastures are commin'
but i know its only after the flowers start buddin'
pollination of the mind and it happens so sudden.
While my rappin, leave you with allergic reactions,
brutal mic tactics, equate to rap backflips.
I'll let yall stay stagnant,
but im takin up action,
dividin' up factions, with a minimal effort;
read between the lines, n'you'll find a subliminal message.
while I deliver the essence, of pure lyricism, without question ;
....Time, is of the essence, so im livin in the present,
past the past, I am walkin my path...
im travelin' fast, I'm travelin' light,
A nomad over these lands, stalkin a mic.
I will, break language down to primordial ooze,
double helix back together and the structures so smooth.


« Last Edit: June 01, 2009, 10:32:32 AM by DIST0RTI0N »
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Re: Lyrics im messing with right now.
« Reply #1 on: May 31, 2009, 05:39:51 PM »

*snaps fingers*

Preach preach!
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Re: Lyrics im messing with right now.
« Reply #2 on: May 31, 2009, 06:17:52 PM »

reminds me of something from Immortal Technique for some reason?
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Re: Lyrics im messing with right now.
« Reply #3 on: June 03, 2009, 02:00:47 PM »

reminds me of something from Immortal Technique for some reason?

your at least the 4th person to tell me that . not just about these lyrics in particular but all my stuff. Funny thing is, I am not even sure if I heard any of the guys music before.
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Re: Lyrics im messing with right now.
« Reply #4 on: June 03, 2009, 02:16:45 PM »

so sir, you were talking with me about editing and what not...I started running my mouth off quick as I can be but i didn't really say anything. 

I think the reason I don't do much editing, is because i write so much.  So a lot of themes, elements, and what not pop up in my writings again and again.  So I see a progression and it's like over time things get editted? does that make sense...When working on actual songs though, i shift and change things as I see fit or as feedbacks and critique come in.
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Re: Lyrics im messing with right now.
« Reply #5 on: June 03, 2009, 02:29:39 PM »

werd werd. I see what u mean .  But I'd say give it a go anyway just to see , cause re-writing stuff on a different day and combining verses from different days you wrote can allow for much more rhyme complexity. Instead of just rhyming off the last word in every line you can get more complex with it and rhyme multiple syllables and rhyme within the line itself instead of just whole words at the end of the line.

I be the elliptical, prototypical genius,
thats using language like chemistry,
a miraculous entity thats attackin the industry,
call me a mechanical animal, maskin identity,
but the task is essentially, to invade the base of the enemy,
& disable the sentries. 
Cause im never consuming my lyrical battery, and defeating platoons with the simplest strategies.   


^^^ 

 Thats a little section of one of my writtens. I think its one of my better ones. That came from 3-4 re-writes.
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Re: Lyrics im messing with right now.
« Reply #6 on: June 03, 2009, 02:32:32 PM »

nice nice!

I be the elliptical, prototypical genius,
thats using language like chemistry,

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Re: Lyrics im messing with right now.
« Reply #7 on: November 12, 2009, 05:11:46 PM »

Something i wrote years ago that, I recently was reading and decided to try to turn it into a full song, this is just the original one I wrote, starts off a little meh but gets better as it goes  :

He was tryin' to figure it out, so there he stood,
But homie didn't know he was walkin' through the wrong hood, thinkin like its all good-
Took a seat and started twistin' up a dutch on a dark stoop -
When a large group, stepped in his direction, surrounded him before he got his thoughts collected -
See, he was all in their section leavin' a hostile impression,
not his intention, but he was tryin' to escape what he stressin-
Took a stroll wit his blunt and now he learnin a lesson. 
They started swingin' rights and then lefts,
And despite the fact that some of em' missed, they left em' with a bleedin face and swollen lip,
Broken ribs and a soldier's fist - That he clutched in pure rage,
As he made the call in the dark of the night,
to start preppin for a war and get the guns and the knives.
He healed up, and put his ear to the streets,
found out where they sleep, busted in and slaughtered the meat.
He never started the beef, just couldn't accept defeat, and revenge never felt so sweet....
till the red and blues took a cruise & discovered the burner he used.
Now homie's stuck in a room preparing to choose, between himself or the crew.
He could add or subtract -  Years to the sentence,
But how longs he gonna last when they start asking the questions.
Now, its to late for the lesson,
What goes around comes around ,
even with vengeance. 

______-------_______


so yea, i wrote that a few years back and now im taking a second look at it and seeing some potential for a deeper story and just an overall more complex song.   




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